Hope you will come here soon!
All the best!
Yours,
Li Hua
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本文格式正确,意思表述完整,行文流畅自然.作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用,还使用了以'which,'引导的非限定性定语从句,从而使文章层次分明,富于变化,不愧为考场佳作.
Dear Bob,
Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.
I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It is on the third floor and there're three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.
Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11 bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive Then I'U be able to meet you at the airport, see you.
Best wishes !
Yours,
Li Hua
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本文格式正确,内容完整,表述清楚,衔接紧密流畅,时态语态使用准确,特别是结尾末段适度的发挥,既充实了内容,又符合逻辑,成为本文与众不同的亮点.
Dear Bob,
How are you these days
I'm so glad to know that you'll come to our city to learn Chinese. You asked me to find a place for you. Now I've found one which I think is pretty good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It's just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.
There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you'll like it. If not, I'll try to find another place for you.
Yours,
Li Hua
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本文内在逻辑性很强,由远及近.由外及内,层次分明,错落有致.同时让步状语从句运用得恰到好处,很出彩,再则结构完整,从开头的问候语到结尾都很完备.
作文:
Dear Bob,
I'm glad to hear from you.
Welcome to our city in september. I've found a suitable house for you.
The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.
It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.
Will you be satisfied with this flat, or you want another one Just let me know. I'll try my best to help you.
Yours,
Li Hua
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本文内容详实,描述具体细腻,用词适当准确,如"suitable house","not far from''等,另外文中的选择疑问句也很有新意.
话题一:中学生的爱好与兴趣
Spare time(业余时间), favorite(最喜欢的), Interest(兴趣), hobby(爱好), appetite(嗜好),taste(口味), read novels(也小说), play football/basketball(打足球/篮球), surf the internet(上网), chat online(在线聊天), play games(玩游戏), collect stamps(集邮), make e-friends(交网友), climb mountains(爬山), watch TV(看电视), enjoy popular music(喜欢流行音乐),be interested in(对…感兴趣), develop an interest in(在…方面发展兴趣), be fond of(喜欢…),be keen on(喜欢…), have love for(喜爱…), have a taste in(对…有兴趣) 等.
话题二:劳动与劳动观念
Work(工作), be at work(在工作), work hard(努力工作), produce(生产), worker(工人), labor force(劳动力), labor(劳动), voluntary labor(义务劳动),serve the people(为人民服务),heart and soul(全心全意),physical labor(体力劳动), mental labor(脑力劳动), labor viewpoint(劳动观念), labor Day(劳动节), workday(工作日), means of labor(劳动方式), honorable(光荣的), be devoted to(奉献于..), value(价值), earn money(赚钱) , personal interests(个人利益)等.
话题三:创建和谐社会
harmonious(和谐的), friendly(友好的), civilized(文明的), honest(真诚的), credible (诚信的), be public-spirited(有公德心的), balanced(平衡的), be in order(有序的), peaceful(和平的), live in harmony(生活和谐), sustainable development(可持续发展)等,help each ether(互助), care for each other(互相关心), have deep love for (热爱), be concerned with (关心), build(创建), cherish(珍惜), take an active part in(积极参与), pay attention to social moral(讲究社会公德), protect the environment(保护环境), save energy(节省能源)等.No pains, no gains. 不劳无获.…can be achieved by hard wok. …可以通过劳动获得.It is difficult to find work in the present situation. 在当前形势下,很难找到工作.It is honorable to … …是光荣的.If everyone … for others and the society, our world will be …如果每个人为他人和社会做…, 我们这个世界将会….Every one should … and devotes himself to building our motherland into a strong country.每个人应该 …,为把我们祖国建设成为一个强壮的国家而奉献自己的力量.
话题四:招聘与求职
employ(雇佣), look for(寻找), take in(吸纳), full-time(全职的), part-time(兼职的), well-paid(薪水高的), be paid by the hour(按小时发工资), requirement(要求), résumé(个人履历),schooling(受教育情况), subjects(课程), working experience(工作经历), qualification(合格证明), trans cript (成绩单), health(健康状况), present address(现在通讯地址)等,apply for(申请…), graduate from(毕业于), major in(以…为专业), degree(学位), scholarship(奖学金), good grades(良好的成绩), hobby(爱好), favorite(最喜欢的), be skilled in(在…方面熟练), be good at(擅长…), experienced(有经验的), confident(自信的), English and computer ability(英语和计算机能力), healthy(健康的)等.

话题五:中学生的健康问题
Physical and mental condition(身体与精神状态), strong(强壮的), un/healthy(不健康/健康的), overweight/fat(肥胖的), thin(瘦的), near/short-sighted(近视的), mentally unhealthy(精神不健全的), normal(正常的), abnormal(不正常的), energetic(精力旺盛的), unhealthy eating habit(不健康的饮食习惯), eat much junk food (吃太多的垃圾食品)等,Stay/keep healthy/fit(保持健康), build up one's body/ improve one's' health(强身健体), enough sleep(充足的睡眠), take regular exercise(进行有规律的运动), roper diet(合理的饮食), good living habits(良好的生活习惯), lose weight(减肥), remove heavy burdens(减轻负担), be good for/do good to(对…有益处), nutrition(营养), go on diet(节食), form. a … eating habit(养成一个…的饮食习惯) Breathe in as much fresh air等.
话题六:环境保护
Pollute(污染),Waste is scattering here and there.(到处撒满了废弃物),protect the environment(保护环境) ,send out smoke and poisonous gases into the air(散发出烟和有毒气体),cut down trees(砍伐树木), pour waste water into the rivers(把废水注入河流),It is a shame to throw rubbish around. (乱扔垃圾是可耻的),form. good habits to protect the surroundings(养成良好的习惯来保护环境), take active measures to protect rare animals(采取积极措施保护稀有动物), take good care of our forests(关心我们的森林),plant more trees to improve the environment (多植来改善环境),The terrible pollution have done great harm to us as well as to the surroundings. (可怕的污染已经给我们自己还有我们的环境带来了很大的危害.)
话题七:校园文明与安全问题
School rules and regulations(学校规章制度),obey(遵守), observe(遵守), keep/observe discipline(遵守纪律), behave well(表现良好),be neatly dressed(穿戴整洁), respect one's teachers and parents(尊敬师长), be on time(准时), keep the environment clean(保持环境干净), civilized(文明的) break the rules(违反规章制度), discipline(纪律), spit(吐痰), throw rubbish everywhere(乱扔垃圾), cheat in the exam(考试作弊), get in line (插队), fight with sb.(与…打架), punish sb. for (因…处罚某人)等.The students are told not to break any of the rules of the school. 学校要求学生不要违反任何规章制度.The students are expected to … 学校期望学生….It must be made clear that the students should … 必须明确的一点是,学生应该…. … is of no good to a friendly and harmonious society. …对创建友好和谐的社会是毫无益处的.It is honorable to obey the principles and rules of our school.遵守学校的规章制度是光荣的.It is worthy of praise to ... …是值得表扬的.It is shameful to … …是可耻的.What we should do is that … 我们应该做的事情是…
话题八:友谊
get to know sb.(认识某人), know sb. really well(熟知某人), make friends with sb.(和某人交朋友), a strong personality (一个很强的个性), personal matters(隐私), friendship(友谊), friendly(友好的), a close friend(一个亲密的朋友), trust each other (相互信任), precious(珍贵的), worthy(有价值的), understanding(通情达理的), share …with sb.(与…分享…), be loyal to(对…忠诚), keep in touch with sb. (与…保持联系), keep company with sb.(和…结交), stay best friends with sb. (和…保持很好的友谊)等.在描述此话题时常用的句型有:
1. Friends give us … 朋友给予我们….
2. A good friend is someone you can … 一位好朋友就是一个我们能够…的人.
3. The first time I met …, he was … 当我第一次遇到…的时候,他….
4. Friendship plays an important part in … 友谊在…中扮演一个重要角色.
5. You can … to be a good friend. 你可以…来成为别人的好朋友.
6. We can turn to ... when we feel down. 当我们心情糟糕时,可以求助于….
7. … makes a good friend. …成就好朋友.
8. A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患难见真知.
9. ... is one of the things people value most in a friend.
… 是人们在朋友身上最重视的东西.
10. … have a friend of … years with sb. … 与… 有着…年的友情.