i have a friend. her name is hou yiyang. she is ten years old. she has long black hair. she has two big eyes and big ears. she has a small mouth and a big nose. she is short and strong. she is active.she likes music and english. she likes coke,cherry and chocolate. she is a good student. i like her very much.
-四（2）班         吴雨欣 指导老师：谭焕娟
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 这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友”，是一篇介绍人物的作文。小作者开门见山，直接点题，首先介绍了朋友的姓名，然后逐一介绍了她的年龄、外貌特征、性格、喜爱的科目和喜欢吃的食物。小朋友们在写作文时，要注意使用自己最熟悉的单词，以免写出一些病句。写作时要注意意思连贯、语句通顺、标点正确、书写清晰、规范等。