this is my home. you can see a living room, a study, a kitchen, two bedrooms and three bathrooms. in the living room, you can see a sofa. the sofa is soft. it makes you feel comfortable. we sit on the sofa and watch tv every night. in the kitchen, you can see a table, a fridge, five cups and a board. the fridge is big. in the study, you can see a table, a desk and a shelf. in my bedroom, you can see a dressing table and two beds. it’s very nice. i like my home.
四（1）班   谢佳利  指导教师：谭焕娟
点评：
这篇文章的题目是“我的家”，是一篇介绍地点的作文，小作者开门见山，直接点题，首先介绍自己家有什么房，然后介绍每个房里有什么东西，最后说出自己对这个家的感受。