学生园地:书面表达五注意和三部曲
编辑:高中作文网一、根据题意打草稿。
Qingdao is to the east of Shandong Province and west of the Pacific Ocean. At first it is a small fishing village and the most of the villagers went fishing. Because of the reform and opening, Qingdao developed very quickly and very soon became developed cities. Tourism is the main source of its economy and every year thousands of tourist all over the country or all over the world come to here to visit. It is known to us, Qingdao is also one of the place which Olympic Games of 2008 will be hold.
二、修改:由于各种原因,尚有许多不如意的地方,需要修改。
Qingdao is in the east of Shandong Province and to the west of the Pacific Ocean. At first it was a small fishing village and most of the villagers went fishing. Because of policy of the reform and opening, Qingdao developed very quickly and very soon became one of the developed cities. Tourism is the main source of its economy and every year thousands of tourists from all over the country and even from all over the world come here to visit. As is known to us, Qingdao is also one of the places where Olympic Games of 2008 will be held.
三、润色:这样一来,基本要点就已经说明了。但要想更精彩则需要进一步修改,用更好的词汇以及更复杂的句型来加以润色。
Qingdao is situated in the east of Shandong Province and on the west coast of the Pacific Ocean. It develops from a small fishing village and the majority of the villagers mainly live on fishing. With the policy of reform and opening being deepened, Qingdao has developed more and more quickly and now it has become one of the developed cities in China. Tourism is its main source and every year thousands of tourists from all over the country and even from all over the world come here to pay a visit. As is known to us all, Qingdao is also one of the places where the Olympic Games of 2008 will be held. Welcome!